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回复内容：(2016-05-26)

 A voluntary activity
    Last Sunday, our class launched a voluntary activity. The aim of this activity is to lead a low-carbon lifestyle and protect our country's environment. In the moring, we left  for the suburb from school to plant trees. In the afternoon we got back and went to the square which is next to our school to give out the leaflets. All I did is to let people realize that protecting our environment is important and useful. After this activity, my classmates prefer to work as volunteers and do some meaningful things. With the society developing rapidly, not only should we develop people' living standard, but also we should protect our environment we live.


同学你好，你的作文句子过于简单和简短，存在这样的问题还是在于你平时积累的少。记住！除了平时在做阅读或是完形时注意积累，一定要把我们写作班讲过的万能句型背下来，这样你才能更灵活的升级句型。
此外，老师之前改过的作文，也请家长督促孩子好好体会，避免再犯类似的错误，这样进步才会更大！
来，一起来解决下面的这些问题吧！

1-内容重复。
例如：Last Sunday, our class launched a voluntary activity. The aim of this activity is to lead a low-carbon lifestyle and protect our country's environment.
这时我们需要将意思相同的部分（志愿者活动：voluntary activity）用从句的形式表达出来，这样就可以避免重复。看一下修改后的句子吧 ：
Last Sunday, our class launched a voluntary activity, aiming to lead a low-carbon lifestyle and beauty our city’s environment.

2-注意拼写，比如morning这个单词，以及后面 develop people’s living standard 中的’s就没有。有可能是家长打字时出现了疏忽，但是孩子也要注意一下，别再是自己书写原因。

3-句式简短单一：
3-1:In the morning, we left  for the suburb from school to plant trees. In the afternoon we got back and went to the square which is next to our school to give out the leaflets.
针对这样流水帐的句子，我们可以变化句型来写：
Leaving for the suburb to plant trees in the morning, we came back to give out the leaflets in the square which is next to our school in the afternoon.

3-2:After this activity, my classmates prefer to work as volunteers and do some meaningful things.
句子可以改为：It is through this activity that my classmates gradually realized the meaning of volunteering, being keen on doing meaningful things.

最后，希望孩子在指导下，作文成绩能有所提高！

回复内容：(2016-06-28)
同学，你这次上交的作文确实比前几次有了很大的进步，值得鼓励！
你这篇作文的整体结构不错，能把作文的内容流畅的表达出来，但还是有几处需要注意的：
1-With the social elder problem increasing remarkably, What we are faced with is a new social problem that…
这句话中，what，应该是小写的，也可能是家长在打字过程中打错了，注意平时在手写作文的时候不要有这种错误，这会影响老师对你的作文整体印象。
2-The robot can not only do some housework but also talk with elders and shares the idea of the new social phenomenon with others.
老师知道你想用not only…but also…来表达两个并列的内容，但是你还记得not only…but also…很重要的一个知识点吗？就是not only，放在句首要到装，所以我们可以利用这一点来增加句式结构。那么结合这个倒装的知识点你的句子就可以修改为：
Not only can robot do some housework but also can talk with elders and share the idea of the new social phenomenon with others.
3-Because of this, our company introduced the household robot for you.
本文是让你在新闻发布会中介绍这个产品，是发生在现在的动作，时态用一般现在时就可以，而且our company 可以看做是一个整体，语态应该是第三人称，所以结合这两点，introduced，要改为introduces。
4- it can deal the phone to the police or you.
这里你是想表达“拨号码”的意思吧？deal是“处理”的意思，dial才是“拨号码”的意思。

回复内容：(2016-07-15)
讲过一个知识点之后，后面的对应习题就都可以做了。如果有不会的问题，可以课下预约助教进行一对一的讲解辅导，不要遗留任何问题。

回复内容：(2016-07-14)
得分17分：
文中多次用到了李老师之前讲过的万能句型，这点很好，尤其是在第一段表达观点时万能句型用得十分恰当，能够吸引批卷老师的注意力。
但是文章整体逻辑不清晰。结尾处你总结了两点支持观点的理由，一是手机可以帮助我们解决问题，二是可以让我们放松身心。
但是你在单独陈述原因的时候，首先你表明了手机有助于学习（First of all, smartphones are good for our studies…）,然后陈述的却是父母不让我们玩手机的理由，（On the contrary, teachers and parents prevent us from buying smartphones….）
所以，会让阅卷老师看起来，逻辑混乱，以后写作文的时候要避免出现这样的错误。

还记得李老师曾经说过的“在规定的字数内，句子数量越少，句子越高级”下面我们就可以将这两句话（First of all, smartphones …them.）合并升级：For one thing, we could use the smartphone to solve the problem we met in the study, which is good for our achievements.
针对你所陈述的第二点原因，我们需要从正面来表达手机的优点：
For another, it is useful for us to reduce the pressure by watching movies or listening to music.
At the same time, we should raise the awareness of the damage of being obsessed with the online games.
因为文章题目要求是“让我们谈一下智能手机的利和弊”，所以在总结的时候要把能表示观点的话先亮出来。
如这句话：Being a teenager who is responsible for my choice, I hold an opinion that we should use the smartphones properly. The smartphones are really important for us….music.
建议改成：Being a teenager who is responsible for my choice, I hold an opinion that the smartphones are really important for us. Not only can it solve our problems, but also it can relax ourselves. However, we should use the smartphones properly. Don’t you agree with me?
这样看起来，逻辑是不是更清晰了呢。
加油，只要多加练习，多加思考，作文成绩会有明显提高的！加油！

回复内容：(2016-08-20)
这道题的正确答案是D。so是低能连词，表示“因果”，这句话翻译过来是：这家商店直到上午11点才开门，所以失去了许多生意。

回复内容：(2016-08-20)
首先，从所给的选项都是小写的，我们可以看出单词“strange”后面的符号是“逗号”，这儿应该是您打字时疏忽了吧。
所以这句话中一共有三个谓语动词，分别是：said；is（strange）；is（true）
根据句法思维“n个句子，n-1个连词”，句子中需要两个连词
因为句子中已经有了一个高级连词“what”，排除A, B选项：and和but都是低能连词
这里yet取的是副词词性，可以和and连用，且连用时and置前。所以答案是D。

回复内容：(2016-08-20)
首先我们排除B和D选项。因为which和when都是高级连词，用来连接两个句子。如果把mixed看作是谓语动词的话，时态与句子的时态（ is a day ）不符。答案在A和C中选，one这里作的是同位语, 同位的是前面所提到的a day，因为并非特指，不需要加定冠词“the”，所以答案就是A。

回复内容：(2016-08-20)
答案A和B都对，A是B的省略形式。